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It's fine! I got it!		30
It's horrible! It doesn't make any sense!		2
I think it needs modifications...		22
	Total Votes:	54

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bookwrmKP

Posts: 21

Posted: 12:17PM Nov 24, 2008

Can you help me? My teaser got rejected, but I thought it was fine! Will you help me fix it? (No pun intended!)
My teaser:

Category: Rebus
Body: Can you decipher this common saying?
Fix it?-NO!
Fix it?-NO!
Fix it?-NO!
Fix it?-NO!
Fix i t?-YES!
Hint:
Answer: Don't fix it if it's not broke

This is what the editors said:
As presented, "i t" does not appear to be broken.

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Dino

Posts: 416

Posted: 09:35PM Nov 24, 2008

Maybe you could draw a little picture with a hammer crashing into it?

Seriously, I think it is fine, but that's why I'm not an editor. My suggestion would be to post you teaser (like you did in this topic) into the "Ask a Question" forum, and ask the editors how it would be possible to represent "broken" in a teaser.
You could ask us, but overall, they are the ones going to accept/reject it, so I would take their word for it, plus that's what they are getting paid for. We don't spend good tax dollars on editors for them to not get used!

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Sass21

Posts: 85

Posted: 06:22PM Nov 25, 2008

Try it this way instead:

Not broken- Don't fix
Not broken- Don't fix
Not broken- Don't fix
Not broken- Don't fix
Broken - FIX IT!

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brainster

Posts: 16362

Posted: 06:39AM Nov 26, 2008

Building up some more on Sass's idea, I'd say change the "Broken" and "Not broken" to synonyms of the same so there's a little more thinking involved.

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Life_Sucks

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Posted: 07:14PM Jan 25, 2009

i agree with the brainster.

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LogicalRoger

Posts: 2292

Posted: 05:13PM Jun 29, 2009

I actually like the original best because it requires a bit of thought (although synonyms wouldn't be too bad), but they were saying that splitting the word apart wouldn't convey that it was broken, which I can agree with. Now if the answer was "if it ain't split don't fix it", then I would say it's perfect.

Oh and yes I know this is very old, but I'm still putting in my two cents.

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Psychic_Master

Posts: 9620

Posted: 09:12AM Jul 8, 2009

I'm not sure. The teaser looks fine the way it is now, IMO. Maybe you could do i/t or i-t or something else to emphasize the brokenness of the word "it"?

You might want to post this in the "Ask a Question" forum so that an editor can respond to it. You'll probably get a better insight as to why the teaser was rejected.

Dino wrote:

You could ask us, but overall, they are the ones going to accept/reject it, so I would take their word for it, plus that's what they are getting paid for.

Braingle editors get paid?

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Paladin

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Posted: 09:49AM Jul 8, 2009

I like it as is... the space in "it" is the actual "cute" part. I would just change "broke" to "broken" for grammar's sake, but as Rog pointed out, the way I've heard this phrase is "if it ain't broke, don't fix it!"

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Yazmeen

Posts: 1024

Posted: 11:11PM Apr 15, 2010

Maybe you could add another space in between "it" or you could make it capitalized?

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FatHead

Posts: 739

Posted: 02:23PM Apr 27, 2010

How about, instead of "fix i t", maybe "fix itt" or "fix iiiiiit".

But yeah, I see nothing wrong with it. It ain't broke, so don't fix it.

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wattsofawesome

Posts: 71

Posted: 04:40PM May 5, 2010

I liked it!

Maybe brainster's suggestion will make more people understand, though

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M2101

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Posted: 01:00PM Jun 30, 2010

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FatHead

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Posted: 08:00PM Jun 30, 2010

M2101 wrote:

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Dude, chill.

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mathisnice

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Posted: 12:05AM Jul 1, 2010

Seriously. And 2101, it's not thee editors who vote on your teaser, it's the general Braingle public, but I believe thee editors have the final say. Did you read the reason of rejection?

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M2101

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Posted: 07:00PM Jul 1, 2010

Sorry. Something must have happened to the quote control.

Anyways, thank you FatHead!

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mathisnice

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Posted: 12:42AM Jul 2, 2010

M2101 wrote:

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All I did was explain the voting process... If you find anything that offends you in the post, please feel free to by all means continue the discussion by Private Message...

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FatHead

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Posted: 09:58AM Jul 2, 2010

M2101 wrote:

Sorry. Something must have happened to the quote control.

Anyways, thank you FatHead!

Thank me for what? I was telling you to chill - you're not Jekyll & Hyde are you? I was agreeing with mathisnice.

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